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People who live in large cities facing a range of problems in their daily life.Do you agree or disagree.

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In the modern era, human beings are more prefer to live in a
city
 as compared to
village
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a village
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 and they are facing many
problems
 in their daily routine life.
This
 essay
discuss
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 the
problem
 and causes of living in a
city
.
Firstly
, The main
problem
 who live in cities
they
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is they
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 do not know about their neighbours and they are very busy in their personal life they do not have
sefficient
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sufficient
 time to talk with their neighbourhood family.
secondly
, they increase their expenditure to change their lifestyle. So,they have
facing
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 many kinds of
problem
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problems
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such
 as pollution.In a survey, it is clearly seen that
in
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a
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survey found that only 40%
people
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of people
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who
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are satisfy
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 to live in a
city
 and the remaining person like to live in a village.
On the other hand
, there are some
person
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personal
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problems
 related to the difficulties which are
mention
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mentioned
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 in
above
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the above
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 paragraph.The solution is we have to use our spare time to meet with our neighbours and share
the
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our
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problems
 and go for a walk
everyday
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every day
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 after dinner and talk about the day,
how's
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how
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 the day
was
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went
due
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and due
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 to
this
, you can improve their family bonds.
Other
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Another
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problem
 is pollution and the
causes
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cause
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 is you can use electric vehicle and transport vehicle like bus and share the vehicle when the destination is same. And less use of plastic bag and you may utilise a jute bags for shopping which is eco friendly in nature. To conclude
this
, we are facing many
problems
to live
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living
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 in
big
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a big
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City
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Cities
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such
 as pollution. But there are many solutions to reduce it.
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