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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#people #managers #decisions #company #employees #decision #process
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head
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 thought by someone to make decisions in the factory, while
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 by others that employees too should involve in the
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 process in any
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. Admittedly, all
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productions
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 will have numerous problems that should be solved by
leader
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the leader
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.
As
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 numbers of ordinary populations think that
manager
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managers
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 alone will fix any issues since they are the leader of the department and
it’s
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responsibility
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their responsibility
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 of them.
On the other hand
, certain companies open
door
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 for employees to aid to find the solution to solve any problems. So, it will put the company in a better position to fix
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the issue
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issue
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 as there will be
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 of opinions.
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, productions are contributed
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 many factors that it cannot run if lacking
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something. So,
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 of the operator will have
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 that issue will be fixed so fast and production can keep going. In fact, most
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the
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managers will put every problem to
foreman
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the foreman
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 or employee to find
the
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 way to fix it.
Moreover
, they will be waiting to punish them if they cannot solve the issue. To conclude,
advantages
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 of more opinion from all
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the accessory
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accessory
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 outweigh
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the opinion
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 of a mere man.
Thus
, the executives of
company
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 should be open-minded
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ideas
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the ideas
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 of employees.
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