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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops In town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays , technology become an online platform to do shopping without going there and
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 any kind of things we can purchase so it impacts local shops and one day , it will close in the country I do not agree with the statement. The
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 and foremost reason is that a number of people believe that the best way to do shopping , we should go there , due to checking the quality of products there ,
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 , currently , most things are available at cheap prices but they have no used amazing materials ,
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 , it will get worse after some time.
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 , sometimes we get other products , when we ordered online , owing to the temptation of bucks ,
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 as during a COVID it increased rapidly ,
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 it encourages the public to do fraud ,
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 a result, we lost our hard-earned capital.
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 , we cannot purchase groceries online , due to if it turns out to be bad , we do not use it ,
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, whenever we go to the grocery store
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 we check the time after we purchase it so it will not get worse.
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 , a plethora person gives order on
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 it encourages them to do more spread business rather than in the past ,
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 ,
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 year , thousands of people change their mindset and forward shop to online.
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 , due to the service , everyone attracts by them , which the public cannot get from local shopkeepers,
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 as home delivery is far more famous rather than others. In Conclusion , both are important for us , due to the reason , we cannot buy some products online , at that time , we must go there , where it is available.
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