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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that both
parents
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 should
work
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 and take care of the family.
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 makes sense in some situations, but I think it's better for a family to divide up tasks. In most cultures, women did not have the freedom to
work
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 until very recently. In the
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 few decades, women have gained more rights in society, which has given them more
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 to grow in their careers. Not only can women now
work
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 and reach their full potential, but they
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 have the chance to take on more responsibility. They can help their families with money and
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 feel better about themselves. But the best way to take care of a child in a family is to have clear roles for everyone. If both
parents
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work
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, the kids won't get enough attention. Of course, rich families can hire a nanny to take care of the kids, but
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 can't replace the love of one's real
parents
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.
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, most families from the working class just have to
work
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 harder at their jobs and at home.
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 can make
parents
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 very tired over time and make them feel helpless and overworked. It can even cause anxiety disorders and depression. In conclusion, if both
parents
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work
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, there wouldn’t be a healthy balance in a family; especially if the couple
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 small kids at home.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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