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Some people are of the opinion that we must discontinue using fossil fuels and adopt renewable sources of energy. Yet others feel that renewable sources of energy are not as dependable as fossil fuels. Discuss both views.

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 will explore both views. Humanity has been using fossil fuels for hundred years and
this
 was still the case until the 20 th century when renewable sources were presented .One primary reason
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such
 a huge usage was the invention of the
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motor
 engine , which was
the
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 great contribution and
biggest
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 historical achievement.And
this
 led that all
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the
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other
 machinery
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 based on the motor engines ,
such
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However
 one big adverse of fossil
fuel
 is that it
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emits
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wich
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 harms the
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layer
 of the Earth and makes holes in it. Whereas
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 protects our planet's surface from gamma rays . On top of that gas or wood which is used in almost all
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machinery
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fuel
 is limited .
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 the
contunuation
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continuation
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this
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materials
 may lead to irreparable consequences. Renewable sources of
energy
 , are becoming more trendy
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.It is reasoned by
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efficency
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efficiency
efficiently
 and quietness . There are many facilities are running on electricity , and yet
amount
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 of these is increasing day by day .Electrical engines have come
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 our
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lives
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 in cars ,fridges ,and other technologies .And
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 engine is not worse than one which runs on fossil
fuel
 ,
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 it has better
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efficiency
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 electro cars are faster and quiet .
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 producing
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energy
enrgy
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energy
 in power plants is full of danger.They need to be protected from lighting
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since they can easily blow up ,but even with preventing power
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 from lightings strikes,it
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 dangerous because of radiation .
However
 there are less dangerous ways to
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 green
energy
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for
instance
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 wind turbines
,
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or
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solar
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 pannes ,they
ca
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 provide enough
energy
 for basic needs and they can easily provide the same
energy
 amount as the power plant or other fossil fuels .
Besides
this
 is danger free , it is not
poluting
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polluting
 air ,or harming the
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layer
 as the fossil
fuel
 does.
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 are obvious . In a nutshell ,
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fossil
fuel
 is
very
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 limited source ,
although
 it was used for many decades ,it has
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several
severeal
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severe
 drawbacks, causing potential danger to
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azon
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layer
, or producing
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noise
 , and even chance to blow up ,
however
 using green
energy
 will elaborate all
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