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More people is moving to the big city to live and work. What are the reasons and results of this trend?

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It is argued the big
city
 is crowded with the public to live and work.
This
 essay will examine the main causes of
people
 moving to the big
city
 and possible solutions to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, the big
city
 has a lot of companies and centres, where
people
 found a lot of careers, but in town does not has companies and centres.
Secondly
, The big
city
 has more necessities of life than the town.
for instance
 schools, hospitals, universities, and entertainment. That's to indeed overcrowd with
people
 and during to reducing the population of the villages.
In addition
 traffic congestion in the streets lead to smoke pollution and
also
 affects health. To conclude,
people
 who live in the big
city
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