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More people is moving to the big city to live and work. What are the reasons and results of this trend?

#people #city #work #results #trend
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It is argued the big
city
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 is crowded with the public to live and work.
This
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 essay will examine the main causes of
people
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 moving to the big
city
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 and possible solutions to
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 problem.
Firstly
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, the big
city
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 has a lot of companies and centres, where
people
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 found a lot of careers, but in town does not has companies and centres.
Secondly
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, The big
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 has more necessities of life than the town.
for instance
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 schools, hospitals, universities, and entertainment. That's to indeed overcrowd with
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 and during to reducing the population of the villages.
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 traffic congestion in the streets lead to smoke pollution and
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 affects health. To conclude,
people
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 who live in the big
city
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