Celebrity status no longer equates with talent accomplishments. Discuss, give reasons and examples.

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the biggest trend. Is celebrity status parallel with rewards and recognition achieved
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point using a pragmatic approach. To commence with, popular personalities in
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of sports, politics and entertainment have stardom because of the awards they receive.
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popularity
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is because of the benchmark they have set in their respective fields,
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Sachin Tendulkar, (Indian Cricketer)is honoured as
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of Cricket” because of the milestones he achieved in Cricket and his records are unique.
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, Pawan Kalyan (Indian Actor) from the entertainment sector has
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among youngsters because of his style and mannerism and the same goes with Chandra Babu Naidu (Indian Politician) in the field of politics because of his vision and future planning. Another crucial factor is that
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individuals are taking
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celebrity stature for granted. The majority of
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mankind are youngsters who want to get instant
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mostly through
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. To mention a few, YouTube influencers and reality show participants are getting instant
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proof Kathi Mahesh in
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the “Big
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Boss” reality show has no name and fame in the field of cinema, he gained
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overnight from a reality show thereby encouraging others to follow
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. To conclude, name and fame should be achieved with performance and excellence by showcasing your talent which in turn may lead to winning awards and creating records. Only when society begins to value genuinely talented individuals
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only will the tide begins to turn and we will see celebrities who have truly earned their status.
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