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Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#accommodation #officer #college #situation #work #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in connection with
my
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 serious problems
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that
taht
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that
 I have faced since I moved to
the
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room
 No.253.
To begin
 with, I have a
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roommate
roomate
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roommate
 who is a student of music and he needs to practice his musical instruments all day.
In addition
, he often
listen
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 to
the
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music loudly deep in the night. His activities have negatively affected my concentration on my work.
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, a couple of days
a go
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ago
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 I had to take an important exam and I needed to have a bit
quiet
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 to review my papers a day before the exam.
However
, my
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roommate
roomate
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roommate
 started playing his violin without paying attention to my request. It resulted in a serious dispute between us so
that
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I decided to move out
the
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room
 as soon as possible. I would like you to take my request into consideration and facilitate my
mouvement
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movement
 to a more
cozy
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 and quiet
room
 where I will be able to lead my academic life without any
further
 issues. I prefer not to share the
room
 with
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anybody
anybod
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anyone
 else. I hope you consider my request and reply back to my letter very soon. Yours faithfully, Amir Safa
Submitted by amir.safa1984 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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