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It is believed that people are suffering from loads of health problems because of consuming too much fast food. Some people hold a thought that education should take responsibility for this phenomenon while others contradict with this opinion. Discuss both of them and give your own point of view

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Health
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 is Wealth;
Health
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 plays a vital
role
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 in everybody's life. Some
communities
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 believe that most
communities
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 are suffering from
health
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 problems due to the consumption of heavy fast
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 and they say that it is the responsibility of the teaching system while some other
communities
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 argue with
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 matter. In
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 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
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 I will give my opinion on
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 matter with relevant examples. On the one side, Some
communities
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 believe that
education
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 plays a crucial
role
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 in our day-to-day life. Many
people
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 are consuming fast
food
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 regularly which is leading to
health
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 problems like obesity. The
Education
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 system should take
care
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 of their children regarding their
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habits
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 because most
people
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 who are consuming fast
food
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 are students. By giving awareness among
people
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 about the consequences of consuming fast
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 students will follow some healthy diets to be healthy.
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, In School, teachers should give some lessons on healthy
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habits
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 and unhealthy
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habits
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then
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 children will be aware of their
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habits
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 and follow a healthy diet. On the other side, Some
communities
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 believe that it is not the responsibility of
education
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 to take
care
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 of
people
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 who will eat fast
food
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. Nowadays, from a child to an adult, everyone is eating fast
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. Family members should take
care
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 of their family those who eat fast because
people
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 will get money from their family members only.
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, A child, who is going to school will take money from his/her father or mother to eat outside so parents and family should take
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 of their child from consuming fast
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. To sum up, In my view
education
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 and family both play a vital
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 in
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 matter. In the present day, most
people
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 are suffering from obesity mainly due to the consumption of fast
food
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. Self-responsibility
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 plays a vital
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 to take
care
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 of their
health
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.
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