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The responsibility for the protection of the environment is by a transnational organization or every country?

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Currently, every country is facing detrimental effects on the environment and
this
 damage is caused by humans.I believe
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 it's the duty of all countries, apart from the international organizations to implement stricter actions to safeguard the mother nature
Firstly
,every nation has to play an active role in protecting the environment by imposing strict laws to manage waste,garbage etc .Encourage biodegradable wastes, and avoid plastic usage which has a large share of polluting the environment.
For example
,India has started a "plastic ban" in local grocery shops and markets ,encouraging environment-safe products like cloth bags.And public who are seen with plastic bags are imposed heavy penalties and
this
 action would discourage the population to opt for any material which has negative effects on our surroundings.
Secondly
 ,International organizations have to schedule regular meetings with officials of every country ,initiate group events , and educate people on the side effects of polluting the earth with toxic chemicals.They need to help people know how everyone is contributing to pollution without one's knowledge.
For example
, the destruction of forests to create housing spaces for humans directly apply impacts the atmosphere.Lack of oxygen and contaminated air is causing respiratory issues to all irrespective of the people's age.So,transnational organizations can help in understanding the impacts and in coming up with effective solutions to eradicate
this
 in near future. I think that international groups and country officials
thus
 need to work hand in hand to identify the major contributing factor of environmental pollution and come up with effective methods in reducing the negative impact on nature.So these systems working together with governments will have remarkable impacts on protecting mother earth .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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