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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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The given table compares the
percentage
 of cellphone users using different phone features in 2006, 2008 and 2010. Overall, it is noticeable that cell phone owners used their phones the most to make calls in all given years, whereas the figures for playing music comprised generally the lowest in all categories.
In addition
, considerable growth can be seen in the feature of recording video in the given years. Looking
first
 at make calls and send/ receive messages, the
percentage
 of these categories remained relatively stable in the given years, the former had an average figure of about 100 per cent and the latter was about 76 per cent. As for the
percentage
 of taking photos, a slight increase can be seen from 66 in 2006 to 76 in 2010. Moving on to playing games and recording videos, both experienced considerable growth. The
percentage
 of playing games witnessed an over twofold increase from 2006 to 2008 and remained at 41 per cent in 2010. Though recording video did not have data in 2006, the figure increased significantly from 9 in 2008 to 35 in 2010.
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