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n their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As the population increased rapidly in the
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 few decades, new
business
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 created. Between all the
businesses
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 they will compete for more
customers
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 which introducing advertising, one of all
businesses
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' methods to gain
customers
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, but is advertising actually a positive development or negative? When a
business
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 meets another competitor,
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 as a
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that is
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 selling identical products or services; it will attempt to eliminate its competitor to 'survive'. If a
company
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 attempts to eliminate its competitors, its goods need to be either unique or very valuable, so that
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 can attract
customers
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' attention. Nowadays,
businesses
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 use advertising to give the consumer a better
impression
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 of their goods which can rise the chance of consumers purchasing their products.Advertising can increase the
impression
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 of a
product
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 substantially if used correctly but sometimes it can
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 leave a bad
impression
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 on a
product
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 or even the
company
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. Nowadays,
businesses
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 are willing to win against their competitors by deceiving their
customers
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,
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 and telling them false information about their products or service.
This
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 action could cause a very remarkable
impression
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 on the
customers
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 and can cause fatal damage to the
company
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 or the
business
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. Some advertising uses a special effect and image to attract
customers
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 but in some cases can
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 bring misunderstandings between
businesses
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 and
customers
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, making
customers
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 believe the
product
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 in the advertisement is identical to the
product
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 the
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 is selling. Misundance will
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 leave a negative
impression
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 of the
company
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 and so on. In my ,opinion advertising is a very useful method to improve the
impression
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 of the
product
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 tremendously, but can
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 damage fatally to the
company
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 if not used in a correct way.
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