Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while other think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?
Some groups of people around the world believe that one of the intelligence factors is to be a successful
person
but others think intelligence is not only about success. I completely agree with this
notion and you can read my opinion in this
essay.
Each person
in the world has their interests and they try their best to be successful in that specific field. It means, that if someone is not successful in one field, it does not mean that he is not an intelligent person
. For example
, I am good at coding with Python language and my teacher told me I am intelligent but if he saw me while
I am
doing the biology exam, his opinion Wrong verb form
was
can
not be the same for sure because I am extremely bad at biology. Ergo, people can be successful in various fields Verb problem
would
as a result
, this
factor is not the right tool to measure everyones’
intelligence.
Change noun form
everyone’s
In addition
, humans can not do everything always in the best way. Sometimes they are not in a good mood or they were not lucky on that day and we should not say to ourselves he is smart or not, maybe he had a bad day and he could not concentrate to do his job so he is not an intelligent person
. For instance
, in Iran’s education system
you should do one exam to reach the university but before that, you will do lots of samples, some students will do a really good job in training samples but in the main quest, they will fail. Add a comma
system,
Therefore
, with only one-time experience
you can not call others not intelligent.
Add a comma
experience,
To conclude
, I believe, all humans around the world are intelligent but if you do not agree with this
it means you did not see him in a good mood or in his professional field.Submitted by jaberi.mahyar on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task response
Provide a more specific and focused opinion on the prompt. Make sure to clearly address both sides of the argument and support your stance with specific reasoning and examples. Also, ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly present your main points and opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more coherently by using clear topic sentences and linking ideas throughout. Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces the topic and your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.