People believe that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that those who contribute to society like scientists, teacher are the most successful. Discuss both and give your opinion?
It is believed that
people
who posses
economic prosperity Correct your spelling
possess
is
exposed to be successful. Others considered that success belongs to Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
contributing to society
as experts or teachers. This
essay will clarify for
both sides of Change preposition
apply
this
view.
On the one hand, individuals always
earn high incomes are the most successful. Correct pronoun usage
who always
For example
, people
who have a high salary are usually working in big companies or having
Wrong verb form
have
good
Change the article
a good
job
and successful Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
people
can afford a luxurious life. It can be seen that citixen
who make a lot of money can enjoy the high living standards with prohibitively expensive products Correct your spelling
citizen
citizens
such
as jewelry
, Change the spelling
jewellery
cars
.
Correct word choice
and cars
On the other hand
, in my opinion, people
who contribute to the community are the most successful. For instance
, not all rich people
gain their money legally because they may commit crimes to make profits. Besides
, people
such
as teachers and scientists who contribute to society
are the most successful in terms of their in
knowledge and social status. It can be seen that Change preposition
apply
people
contribute
to Correct pronoun usage
who contribute
society
receive respect from other people
and successful
in Add a missing verb
are successful
society
.
In conclusion, being rich can be considered to be successful. However
, I keep opinion
that Correct article usage
the opinion
people
who contribute to society
are the most successful ones.Submitted by thaothanh1323 on
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