The government's investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

The opening statement explains that the

administration

spending

money

in

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art

,

music

, and

stage

games

is not useful spending

money

.

Administration

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The administration

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should pay

this

money

for public services. P1 Take a look at the

administration

spending

money

in

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art

,

music

, and

stage

games

is

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are

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not useful spending

money

because the

government

spends a lot of

money

for

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these social activities.

Moreover

, when some urgent problem can not be solved, maybe since the

government

has less

money

. All over the

world

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some

people

have not got any house

hence

if the

administration

won't spend

money

for

this

situation they can build some

house

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houses

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and will give to homeless

people

.

However

, society will have much fun together thanks to

art

,

music

and

stage

games

consequently

of

this

issue perhaps

people

will not do harmful things. Many

people

can meet new

people

and be friends with them when they go to

art

exhibitions, concerts or

theater

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theatre

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.

Moreover

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the artist’s budgets are increased and they can focus on creating new things for the

art

. P2 I see eye to eye with

administration

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the administration

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spending

money

in

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art

,

music

, and

stage

games

are

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is

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not useful spending

money

way.

Administration

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The administration

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should pay

these

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this money

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money

for public services.

People

have some social needs and vital needs

furthermore

vital needs

comes

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come

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first

.

Hence

we

have

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tohave

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spend

money

for

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their priority needs. I

have

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met a homeless man who was in a really abysmal situation. I talked with him and he said to me “The

government

must help me so I am dying day by day.” I thought when he was in like that status the

government

how can spending

money

for other citizen’s funs. CONCLUSİON To sum things up, the

government

must not spend

money

for

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social activities and spending

money

for

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urgent problems is more logical than other ways.