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An increasing number of 18-year-olds are moving out of their parents' homes so they can live on their own after finishing high school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, Teenagers are living in their parent's
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 so they get less involvement from their parents.It is
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 common in many countries to leave
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 after a certain
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. it has both pros and cons . I will discuss both in
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 essay. If children are leaving
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, it makes them more responsible as they have to take care of cooking, laundry groceries shopping all alone. At
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 they have to learn time management as well and they have to do things all alone.in some ,countries families are big or joint so they have no privacy or space to study in
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 conditions they can focus more on their studies,
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 they learn to manage financial management as well , as they have a small budget.
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, leaving
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 have some disadvantage as well because now they have to do all household chores. and they have no imotional suporrt. At
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 teenagers tend to get more deviated towards wrong so they need guidance from parents or guardians . To conclude, moving out of
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 has a positive impact as well as a negative impact . some take it positive opportunity and some take it in
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 we discussed possible positive and negative scenarios.
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