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Telephones should be banned from secondary schools agree or disagree with reasons

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Some People believed that
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 should not bring their mobile phones to the institute . personally, I agree that enlistees don'
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 have a mobile when they are in
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 . On the one hand , if
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 has a telephone in the institute view have not any negative effects for them but it is not reality.
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,when
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 has a mobile phone in the institution,maybe their focus is decreasing and they haven'
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 enough attention to the classroom and learning.
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, some
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 can cheat when they have exams.
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 when they don'
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 know questions they can search on the web and find solutions.
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, having a telephone everywhere and anytime can be addictive for
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 and it's not good for them.
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, somebody argues that having a mobile in an academy can help
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 in learning lessons,
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,they can search for essays that relatives to their lessons and learn new points . parents can awaken the children when they are in
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.but they can search with computers which are in schools or parents can know from children by calling schools.
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 it's better for
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 that don'
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 bring mobile to
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 and completely focus on their learning. In conclusion,while
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 have a self-device in
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,it can be harmful to their aims of going to
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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