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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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For as today the world facing problems of insufficient foodstuff, and many countries try to fix the problem by finding other food to substitute. The scientists think they can find the solution for deficiency of food by doing much research and trying to produce psuedomeat which has been eaten in some countries already. Some said artificial
meat
 is not real and can't alternate the fresh
meat
 so they prefer to eat other products
instead
. In my country, local
people
 eat almost products they can find.
This
 is because in urban areas, the income for capital is low and
meat
 in the market is high recently so they find
meat
 in their areas
such
 as dogs, frogs, and geckos including
insects
. You can buy fried
insects
 in the local market. As the fact said the protein from
insects
 is higher than from other
meat
 compare to the same weight. which is a benefit to us that we can consume food with a small amount but we get the high energy from them and paid in small money. Some
people
 don't dare to try
insects
 either. There was news saying that
people
 eat
insect
Fix the agreement mistake
insects
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 and were dead from the poison or some contaminated element inside
insects
. I think
insects
 should be editable to eat if their species has been researched and has proved that can be eaten.
Insects
 that are not illegal to eat and are found selling on the market should be punished. Most of all
people
 should keep watching the news and always read the research for our own good
ourselves
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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