In some countries, boys and girls are educated in different school rather than in the same school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

There is no iota of doubt about the fact that education plays an important role in our
life
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. In some regions of the world
student
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students
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of the opposite gender
not
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study together. In
this
essay, I will outline what I consider to be the potential advantages of a non-coed education
system
, that I feel are likely to occur,
as well as
some of the negative outcomes. First and foremost, the main advantage of the non-coed schooling
system
is that students are more focused in
this
environment. obviously, if boys and girls are not studying together they are not going to
distract
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while
studying.
for instance
, one of my friends completed his study till 12th class in boys school, he was very focused and he got marks in every class 98 per cent
whereas
after 12th he got admission in coed college his score was drastically decreased.
Moreover
, science topics like production or some medical
topic
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can be discussed more properly in a non-coed education
system
rather than in the coed
system
.
On the other hand
, the pupil who studied not with the opposite gender has
socially
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interaction issues. because they have less interaction with the opposing sex, they hesitate to talk to each other.
As a result
, they
face
a lack of self-esteem and communication problems. In fact, a report from the London
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published that students who study in the non-coed
face
a lack of confidence.
Furthermore
, non-coeducational background learners
face
a hard time
friends
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with each other. In conclusion, even though I feel the coed learning
system
is much more focused and motivated, non-coed
face
low self-esteem. Students should
face
both experiences.
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