many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less Sugar. do you agree or disagree?

many manufactured food and drink

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contain high levels of

sugar

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, which causes many health problems. sugary

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should be made more expensive to encourage

people

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to consume less

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Sugar

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. do you agree or disagree? it is accepted that

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amount

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of

sugar

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in different processed food and drinks may lead to getting several diseases. some

people

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believe that increasing the

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of sugary goods can prevent

people

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from using too much

sugar

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.

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, I personally believe that it is not the best way to reduce these

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products

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consumption. rising the

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of any commodities might bring about some negative results.

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, when the

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of a good goes up, many

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will be deprived of using it.

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, it is not their choice to consume less. they are

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situation.

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, it is worth noting that excessive

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of

sugar

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can cause health problems.

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, individuals have to pay more despite the fact that they do not decide to

use

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high levels of

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.

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, when the

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of a commodity climbs, the

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of other goods will respond to

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change relatively.

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, the inflation rate will increase and families' welfare will decline.

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, when the

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of essential goods increased in our country, Iran, due to increasing the exchange rate, the inflation rate went up rapidly. there are other efficient ways which are able to control

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sugary

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consumption.

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with, families should be informed about the consequences of

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excessive

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of

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as high blood pressure.

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,

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should warn the community of medication

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in case of involving a chronic disease

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by malnutrition. in conclusion, it is undeniable that containing high levels of

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in

diet

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may lead to several illnesses.

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some commentators claim that increasing the

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of sugary food can encourage the community to

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less, I personally believe that other ways like raising public awareness can act more

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.