Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, such as sky diving and rock climbing.Do you agree or disagree?

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love to live
adventurous
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life
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and like to explore
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nature and do
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thrilling activities. According to some, sports like sky diving and rock climbing should be banned which could hurt physically.
As per
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these sports should never
banned
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.
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, these activities are
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some what
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dangerous but give chances to explore
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nature and if it is done under supervision with proper support they are less dangerous . According to some
such
kind of physical activity can bring lifetime disability so government should ban these.
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sky diving can give you a lifetime disability or some can die. Same for Rock climbing as well , if someone is climbing on a mountain with no rope or helmet and slips it can
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to serious injury . One more example of
such
kind of sport is scuba diving where a person can interact with dangerous creatures and can be hurt. so as per some these
kinds
of activities should be completely banned so that there won't be any chances of mishappening in sports.
However
, understanding the negative effects, If these
games
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supervision and proper training will help
people
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government should encourage these
kinds
of
games
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early age
like
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making similar
kinds
of replicas in parks or community centres so that kids can enjoy themselves and be more active.
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rock climbing can make kids more flexible. as per me driving a car is
also
dangerous but
people
do it after proper training so the same goes for adventurous
games
as well. To sum up,
instead
of banning
such
kinds
of
games
the government should encourage
people
to live happening life but providing proper trainers and by inspecting on a regular basis that
such
kind of
games
is not performed without trainers.
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