Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, such as sky diving and rock climbing.Do you agree or disagree?
Some supervision and proper training will help
people
love to live adventurous
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an adventurous
life
and like to explore Replace the word
lives
the
nature and do Correct article usage
apply
the
thrilling activities. According to some, sports like sky diving and rock climbing should be banned which could hurt physically. Correct article usage
apply
As per
Change preposition
In
Correct pronoun usage
my
me
these sports should never Add a comma
,me
banned
. Change the verb form
be banned
Although
, these activities are Correct your spelling
somewhat
some what
dangerous but give chances to explore Correct your spelling
somewhat
the
nature and if it is done under supervision with proper support they are less dangerous .
According to some Correct article usage
apply
such
kind of physical activity can bring lifetime disability so government should ban these. For
example
sky diving can give you a lifetime disability or some can die. Same for Rock climbing as well , if someone is climbing on a mountain with no rope or helmet and slips it can Add a comma
,example
led
to serious injury . One more example of Change the verb form
lead
be led
such
kind of sport is scuba diving where a person can interact with dangerous creatures and can be hurt. so as per some these kinds
of activities should be completely banned so that there won't be any chances of mishappening in sports.
However
, understanding the negative effects, If these games
are performed underAdd an article
the
people
to learn more . On the other, hand
government should encourage these Correct article usage
the, hand
kinds
of games
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at in
in
early age Correct your spelling
an
like
making similar Change preposition
by
kinds
of replicas in parks or community centres so that kids can enjoy themselves and be more active. for
example
rock climbing can make kids more flexible. as per me driving a car is Add a comma
,example
also
dangerous but people
do it after proper training so the same goes for adventurous games
as well.
To sum up, instead
of banning such
kinds
of games
the government should encourage people
to live happening life but providing proper trainers and by inspecting on a regular basis that such
kind of games
is not performed without trainers.Submitted by pooja.raikwar27 on
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