Some people think that there should be a complete ban on all forms of advertising. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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society that there should be
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ban on
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of stuff. I totally
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with
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statement. Without
advertisements
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customer
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cannot able to know about the quality of
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. The main supportive ideas of
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paragraph To commence with, Advertising a
product
make
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of people clear about the quality of
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.With the help of
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people will
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what is trendy in the markets.
For instance
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of
promotions
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a person is able to know about the
company
's schemes which are for the
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of the individuals .
Therefore
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of
advertisements
for society
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is important for customers and
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as well .
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of a
company
will increase with the help of
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trend in the sale of their goods.
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a
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better competition with the help of promotion. So
this
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along with consumers In conclusion, the role of
advertisements
cannot be neglected. It is a way to show the dominant features of the goods of a particular
company
. It brings so many comforts for the users and for the
company
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ban
  • advertising
  • information dissemination
  • economic growth
  • freedom of speech
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • vulnerable populations
  • regulations
  • privacy concerns
  • cultural homogenization
  • media literacy
  • targeted ads
  • sustainable lifestyles
  • ethics codes
  • purchasing decisions
  • competition
  • innovation
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