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Some people think that there should be a complete ban on all forms of advertising. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #ban #forms
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In
this
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section
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 of
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society that there should be
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a complete
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 ban on
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 of stuff. I totally
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 with
this
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 statement. Without
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advertisements
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customer
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customers
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 cannot able to know about the quality of
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product
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the product
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. The main supportive ideas of
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 paragraph To commence with, Advertising a
product
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 make
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 of people clear about the quality of
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product
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.With the help of
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advertisements
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 people will
able
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 to know
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what is trendy in the markets.
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 of
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these kind
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 of
promotions
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,promotions
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 a person is able to know about the
company
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's schemes which are for the
benefits
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 of the individuals .
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this
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 is the
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 of
advertisements
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 for society
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,
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 of
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product
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products
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 is important for customers and
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company
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 as well .
Sale
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The sale
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 of a
company
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 will increase with the help of
advertisements
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.
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, a
company
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 can advertise its
product
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 in a better way to make
upward
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 trend in the sale of their goods.
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Moreover
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 a
company
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 can reduce the sale of
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company
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 by giving
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better competition with the help of promotion. So
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 is the one major benefit of advertisement which can give profit to
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company
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the company
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 along with consumers In conclusion, the role of
advertisements
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 cannot be neglected. It is a way to show the dominant features of the goods of a particular
company
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. It brings so many comforts for the users and for the
company
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ban
  • advertising
  • information dissemination
  • economic growth
  • freedom of speech
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • vulnerable populations
  • regulations
  • privacy concerns
  • cultural homogenization
  • media literacy
  • targeted ads
  • sustainable lifestyles
  • ethics codes
  • purchasing decisions
  • competition
  • innovation
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