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Scientists contribute more to society, so science students should get more support.

Science
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 is the backbone of technological developments that have helped in human dominance in the world. It is true that the government and authorities have not provided any extra incentives or scholarships to
science
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students
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. In my opinion, the government should provide extra benefits to
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students
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. To commence with, scientists and researchers are the people who dedicated their lives to society.
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, they are the people who work hard to discover new technologies, medicines and the like by neglecting their family life. As everyone knows a scientist’s life is full of stress and tension, and most intelligent youngsters have a reluctant mind to become a scientist or researchers.
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, scientists are the boons to humanity. In
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 modern world, most of the essential problems can be solved with a mouse click ranging from e-banking to telemedicine.
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, Computers, televisions and mobile phones have made human life easier, faster and more efficient.
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, there are thousands of
students
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 who do not have the basic facility and money to complete their elementary education which is quite necessary for the development of the country and individuals. There is an army of people who assert that a 100% literacy rate should be the primary goal of a country and the illiterate need to get more support. In
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 regard, providing extra facilities to the
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students
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 only might seem like a discriminative idea. To recapitulate, scientists’ contribution towards society and to the world is invaluable so the
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students
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 deserve more favourable support from the government, these supports can attract more
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 to
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 field.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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