Many people think that group or team activities can be more useful for life than those activities which are done alone.

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Many
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think that group or
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activities can be more useful for life than those activities which are done alone. It seems that
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under that statement will never end. But I totally agree with that!
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of all, human is a collective
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. There are a huge amount of !-examples -!. The main thing of all of them is that
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can not leave without society. And if
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have a lack of communication with others it can cause !- psychological -
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issues. And to be able to leave
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and !-
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-! life you should know how to act in society.
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, nowadays, many
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educational systems are established on group
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activities activities
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is additional proof that humans are able to do their best only with a
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. If that statement is not true, why do so smart and high-educated teachers support it?
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, but not least is that
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membership develops many of our useful skills.
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, leadership, personal communication,
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. All of them are important to us just to have a good job and social status. And can you imagine someone who is able to develop their leadership skills without other
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? It is simply impossible. To sum up, I should say, that indeed there are some activities that require doing them alone. But what are the most popular sports in the world? Right-
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as football (№1) and ice hockey (№2). It is always more enjoyable to follow how the whole
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works
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than to follow one person.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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