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With the rise of e-books comes the decline of paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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 some people believe,
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is a revolution in reading history, while others
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 how
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 it has some abysmal
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 too.
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, if you are a professional reader you should bring your book with you everywhere, but with electronic book
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 you only need to have a device
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 or laptop to open your book’s pdf and read it.
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 but you forgot to buy a newspaper,
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 you are going to download that newspaper or magazine with your phone
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 is one of the positive points of
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 world.
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, you do not have to always read your book or news from paper and
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, reading and looking too much to monitor will hurt your eyes and brain which can have
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 on your physical health.
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revolution
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 pandemic started, because on those days everyone had to stay at home and students could not go to
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school, which education system used electronic
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children
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 and I had experienced a bad
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 and eye hurting.
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childrens
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 to
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