Some people say that computer games are bad for children by all means; others believe that these games are contributing to children’s development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There has been a controversy about whether computer
games
are advantageous or disadvantageous to the growth of
children
. I think there are positive and negative ways, and they will be explained in the following paragraphs
First
, they can develop and practice
children
's imagination. It's commonplace that there are hundreds and thousands of constructive
games
which allow players to build whatever they want in the
games
.
Therefore
,
children
's imagination can be developed to a large extent on account of the content of those
games
.
Besides
, these
games
are helpful for future jobs as well. Take me as an example. I'm playing a
game
called Sims 4 currently. In
this
game
, players can build their wished houses by themselves,
such
as a big mansion.
This
game
affects me largely, not only because of its beautiful scenes but
also
because it teaches me some basic knowledge of construction. At
this
point, a good
game
can help kids to think
further
and gives them some expectations of future occupations.
Second
, gaining pleasure. It's expected that due to technological development, diplomas are of the utmost importance nowadays.
Hence
, in order to attain a good diploma, many
children
have to study arduous at a young age.
Nevertheless
, living in a stressful and competitive environment perenially has some negative mental effects, like depression. In
this
case,
games
can help
children
to relax, and give them a safe shelter so they can stay away from reality for a
second
.
On the other hand
,
games
have some demerits as well.
For instance
, they exert an irreparable impact on our bodies. There is an increase in the myopic rate of
children
, and video
games
are considered one of the biggest contributors.
Games
keep players away from sunlight, and without the protection of
sunlight
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our eyesight can be worsened considerably. In conclusion, I believe the merits of
games
outstrip their demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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