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THE USE OF MOBILE PHONES IS AS ANTISOCIAL AS SMOKING. SMOKING IS BANNED IN ERTAIN PLACES SO MOBILE PHONE SHOULD BE BANNED LIKE SOKING. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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The given bar graph compares twelve different
countries
 in terms of the figure of
medals
 that were won in the Olympics. Overall, it is clear that the
USA
 has the biggest figure in the total number of
medals
, whereas Japan has the least
medals
 among all
countries
.
In addition
, the number of gold
medals
 in the
USA
 is
also
 the highest. Looking
first
 at the
USA
 and the Soviets , they are the only two
countries
 that won over 1000
medals
,
USA
 has about 1000 golds, 650 silvers and 500 brown
medals
, with a total of 2150, which is much higher than that of the Soviet Union, at around 1000. Apart from the
USA
 and the Soviet Union, only the Uk, France, Germany and Italy have won over 500
medals
, which all demonstrated a similar distribution. With regard to other
countries
, Japan shows the lowest number of
medals
 of all
countries
, at only 400, and China is the only country that has a relatively high proportion of gold
medals
 except the
USA
 and the Soviet Union.
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