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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that social
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 is important to our
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. I partly agree with both ideas for the following reasons. Social has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand,
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. If you have to see or write a letter to your friend before, now you just use social to do that. The social
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life
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, when some people were overuse social and spent most of their time on
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, they were lost their relationships.
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 has had a negative effect on their social lives. That can make their
life
 worse if they don’t change their social lives. In short, it's logical to accept the negative and the positive of
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. Another factor of greater importance is that we should take everything into account before deciding.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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