Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. Others, however, believe that people should be free to choose sports. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some
sports
are considered to be dangerous due to
Correct pronoun usage
their violence
violence
nature and high chances of injuries. Replace the word
violent
While
some argue that hazardous sports
must be banned, I am in favor
of those who believe in the freedom of choice between Change the spelling
favour
sports
. Some sports
involve violence
and athletes
get hurt. This
has led some to bring up the idea of illegalization
of Correct article usage
the illegalization
such
sports
. They assert that if such
sport
games are not to be banned, not only vice Change the noun form
sports
behavior
would be encouraged in society, but Change the spelling
behaviour
also
competitors are likely to get hurt. This
can be significantly true about some sports
that are based on physical assaults such
as boxing, wrestling, MMA, and so on. Audiences of these type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
sports
, especially young ones, are more likely to commit violent acts because of the influence of brutality
of Correct article usage
the brutality
sport
fights on them. Change the noun form
sports
Furthermore
, athletes
could get serious injuries during such
sports
. The culprit is rather clear since opponents of these type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
sports
are going to be hit by their rivals. Thus
, these types of dangerous sports
should be banned in order to prevent the promotion of violence
among individuals and health problems of
Change preposition
among
athletes
. On the other hand
, forbidding people from watching and doing some sports
, could be considered as
violation of human rights. Since Correct your spelling
a
athletes
know what they are getting into, and Correct article usage
the watching-crowd
watching-crowd
Correct your spelling
watching crowd
know
what they are about to see, banning these Correct subject-verb agreement
knows
sports
could violate peoples' freedom of choice. Thus
, individuals must be able to choose what sports
they want to do or watch. Nevertheless
, this
could not be employed for teenagers, due to
their lack of sufficient awareness about the dark sides of dangerous sports
that could cause serious damages
to their health. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
For instance
, some boxers have died during their match which for sure is not appropriate for adolescents to witness,
and can have Remove the comma
apply
negative
impact on their mental health. Add an article
a negative
To conclude
, although
watching and doing dangerous sports
could cause violence
promotion and serious damages
, respectively, in my opinion, people should be free to choose to do so or not. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
However
, I also
believe that children must be banned from choosing such
sports
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion