Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is a common thought that having
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diploma is the main key to
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job.
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there is another group of people who have another conception, which advocates being accepted by showing skills and presenting experience. Honestly, I am of the opinion of the
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group, since I prefer to estimate employees by looking at their abilities and potential. Admittedly, it is acknowledged that a student might not have bright perspectives in his future career without studying
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4 years at an academy where he receives much knowledge, theory and proficient practice.
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point could be agreeable,
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there got to be
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that the student is able to manage the work. The diploma may not always be enough reliable indicator for that. There were many cases where passionate students in pursuit of a high GPA had been cheating in their long journey of learning, which may be full of struggle and pain. Nowadays,
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is filled
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many websites which share ready graduate works.
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where learners can be taught about cheating tips
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, where learners can be taught about cheating tips in platforms such as youtube and tiktok,
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platforms
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as youtube and
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vast number of views.
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university teaches an enormous amount of knowledge,
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not all
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graduates
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the graduates
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manage to understand that input. Having a diploma and a high score of GPA can not guarantee employers that he is going to hire a highly qualified postgraduate. For
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reason, having
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experience and professional skills may be significantly crucial for being ready to start working and fulfilling tasks. One clear example is an online school of languages where I am currently gaining experience as a young teacher. If I had known about
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school earlier, I would have applied there a year ago. Unfortunately, I had misbeliefs in my mind as the
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group of people have right now. In the
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I want to say that I do believe that universities release many
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employees, but I can not accept the concept that it might be the best path to success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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