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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in an area. Others believe that local councils should allow people to choose different designs for their houses. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Across many countries worldwide, long ago, there were many
houses
 which were built in the same infrastructure and today some
people
 still believe
than
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 the same style of
houses
 should continue to be built.
However
, there are
people
 who do not perceive it in the same
way
 and they believe that
people
 should have
the
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permission from the local authorities to construct their
houses
 as they wish. In the
next
paragraphs
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 we will discuss
about
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both views. In the past, all
houses
 were built in the same
way
 as there was not a variety of materials as nowadays.
Moreover
, architects and engineers were in fewer numbers and they have to follow the rules that the authorities have set for
a
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house
 construction.But still, there are
people
 continuing to build
houses
 in the same
old fashioned
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way
. In
this
 new era, we can observe that the infrastructure and design of
houses
 are changing. As
far
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the
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as the
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 concept of the
houses
 and the plan of the building are certified by an architect and engineer, the authorities should allow
people
 to build the
house
 of their choice. Today,
people
 have dreams of designing their own
houses
 as they wish.
In addition
, a
house
 is where someone should fill relaxed and happy to live
in
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. I believe that the government should give the right to
people
 to build their
houses
 in their own
way
 as long they respect all rules. When you visit a place with the same home style, it becomes boring.
However
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 when you visit a place where you see a panoply of
houses
 it becomes interesting to visit
this
 place. In conclusion, I believe that
people
 should get the choice to build
their
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house
 of their choice as long they follow the norms set by the government.
Thus
, the old fashion
house
 should be discontinued to be built.
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