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Some people feel that entertainers(pop singers film starts and sports starts)are paid too much money.do you agree or disagree.which other types of job should be highly paid.?

#people #entertainers #pop #singers #film #sports #money #job
Film
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,news and sports industry is the biggest
money making
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 business nowadays.Many of the people working
on
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in
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 movies and entertainment industries are currently earning
in
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billions.I completely agree
to
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 the fact that the entertainment manufacturing hub is booming with its workers earning more than the rest. The population is rising exponentially and so
as
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 the market.Due to busy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 people both working and
home makers
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homemakers
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 watch movies or television shows
a
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stressbuster.
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this
 is leading to
high
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the high
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 demand
of
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 the television industry.Many youngsters are getting popular
in
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 social media.
This
 is mainly due to their talents.
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 newer pop and folk artists have come up with
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modern
mordern
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modern
 varieties of songs.
For example
, Indian singer and lyricist Pratik Kuhaad
,
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 gained huge popularity both nationally and internationally due to his newer way of writing songs and singing as well.
Additionally
, the sports industry
also
 covers a huge percentage of
crowd
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the crowd
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.Previously the male population were more interested in extracurricular
entertainments
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entertainment
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.Today both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 enjoy watching cricket and football matches equally.
Therefore
,amongst all other industries,media has almost been
on
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the topmost priority
Therefore
,
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