The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate
road
access to a
city
hospital in 2007 and in 2010. It is apparent that the layout of the
city
hospital had experienced some changes. In the past, the hospital was encircled by Ring
Road
and Hospital
Road
led to the entrance of Ring
Road
.There was another
road
named
City
Road
parallel
Ring
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to Ring
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Road
. All of the roads remained in 2010. The major change was that two roundabouts were built up on two ends of Hospital
Road
linking Ring
Road
and
City
Road
. There are other changes taking place. On the east side of Hospital
Road
, there was a car
park
both for staff and the public in 2007. After modifications,
this
car
park
was changed into a
staff
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staffed
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park
in 2010. And a car
park
which was exclusive to the public could be approached in the east of
City
Hospital, situated along the side of Ring
Road
.
Besides
, a new bus station located in the southwest of the hospital replaced the small bus stops alongside Hospital
Road
. In general,
road
access to the hospital was altered and extended, and some public facilities were established between 2007 and 2010.
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