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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010. It is apparent that the layout of the
city
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 hospital had experienced some changes. In the past, the hospital was encircled by Ring
Road
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 and Hospital
Road
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 led to the entrance of Ring
Road
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.There was another
road
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 named
City
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Road
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 parallel
Ring
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to Ring
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Road
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. All of the roads remained in 2010. The major change was that two roundabouts were built up on two ends of Hospital
Road
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 linking Ring
Road
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 and
City
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Road
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. There are other changes taking place. On the east side of Hospital
Road
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, there was a car
park
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 both for staff and the public in 2007. After modifications,
this
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 car
park
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 was changed into a
staff
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staffed
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park
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 in 2010. And a car
park
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 which was exclusive to the public could be approached in the east of
City
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 Hospital, situated along the side of Ring
Road
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.
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, a new bus station located in the southwest of the hospital replaced the small bus stops alongside Hospital
Road
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. In general,
road
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 access to the hospital was altered and extended, and some public facilities were established between 2007 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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