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what are advantages and disadvantages of using social network

#network
In recent years, with the development of
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technologies
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 the use of social
sites
 scaled up rapidly across the world.
Although
 these
sites
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 so many usefulnesses, there are several
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drawbacks
 too. Here, both the pros and cons will be explained in the subsequent paragraphs. Let's begin with the benefits of social
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. In the current world, people are too busy with diverse activities that they barely get time to visit their families or friends. As a solution to
this
 problem, apps like messenger, what's
app
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,
instagram
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 etc. came up with different features through which we can easily communicate with our loved ones despite living in remote places.
Therefore
 distances became closer and
also
 time and money are no longer creating obstacles
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 communication and networking.
In addition
, platforms like
likedin
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LinkedIn
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 us to be up to the mark about professionals without any direct contact.
Moreover
, we are now more connected and can access more due to the blessings of social
sites
. Now, let's move on with the inconveniences induced by social
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. One of the most damaging
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 of social
sites
 is the spreading of rumours within
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 which can take
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 of innocents.
For example
, several suicide incidents took place in many countries just because of the humiliation over social
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. Another point worth mentioning is that, due to many
attarctive
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attractive
 functions, many of us spend our valuable
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 on meaningless
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 which is alarming to our productivity.
However
, despite all the negative
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 social platforms are now a part of our daily life which we may not completely get rid of. But we must control the
usages
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 of networking
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 so that our main tasks are not hampered.
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