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People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #english #jobs #access
Education plays an important role in everyone’s
life
. Every country has its own
language
.
However
,
English
 is a subject which is common
among
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in
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 many nations. It is believed that if a person is well-versed in
English
then
 there are good opportunities for employment and help to maintain a standard
living
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of living
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. In my opinion, I agree with the statement because
mostly
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most
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 developed nations need an individual with communication
skills
.
To begin
 with,
English
 is now spoken worldwide and an individual with excellent communication
skills
 in
this
language
 has always had an upper edge in the current job market.
Moreover
, it provides better opportunities
in
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for
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 jobs across the globe. It is fact that many countries have
English
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the English
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language
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as its
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its
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their
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 official dialect.
For example
,
USA
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the USA
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,
Canada
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and Canada
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 is offering highly paid employment to people who have perfect and good communication
skills
.
Hence
,
skills
makes
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make
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 a man perfect whether it is personal or professional.
On the other hand
, it has been seen that a person with good control
on
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of
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this
 vocabulary feels much more confident than others.
Furthermore
, learning
new
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a new
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language
 does not guarantee a good lifestyle.
Life
 is a way of living not dependent on
salary
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the salary
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 or perks of
individual
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the individual
an individual
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.
For instance
, many celebrities
not
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are not
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 so good
in
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at
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English
 but
still
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are still
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 successful in
life
.
Thus
, to become
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a success
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success
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successful
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 in
life
 one should have
a
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apply
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talent and can do hard work. T conclude
,
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apply
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 it is a fact that proficiency in
this
 is highly beneficial for a person to rise personally and professionally as it gives an opportunity to grab highly paid jobs as well as to raise your standards.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literate in English
  • global job opportunities
  • multinational companies
  • working language
  • educational opportunities
  • higher qualifications
  • job prospects
  • industries
  • technology, finance, healthcare
  • key skill
  • higher-paying jobs
  • proficiency
  • standard of living
  • facilitate immigration
  • remote working opportunities
  • income stability
  • non-English-speaking countries
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