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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, well-paid jobs are essential for every individual. Many humans believe that to
being
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 highly qualified
then
 only they are getting good salaries but some others say the experienced people give preference for high pay off. In
this
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 and my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, education plays an important role in the life of
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a student
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student
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. The college and universities
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 a curriculum which helps to understand the particular concept related to their field.
Secondly
,
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 laboratory facilities, the students are getting practical knowledge together with the academic theories.
This
 can give them an idea about the competition in the market.
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,
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Doctors take
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degree
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 in surgical to become
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 in their subjects.
Furthermore
,
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job interviews and the opportunity of getting a well-paid job, which is the
first
 step into
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 career, can be acquired through institutional studies.
On the other hand
, many multinational companies prefer to hire a person with good background and offered them
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high wages.
Moreover
, firms think that they can get good revenue with highly
skills
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 staff.
For instance
, Facebook and Twitter always give preference to candidates who have experience.
Hence
, certain jobs require practice more than theoretical intelligence. To conclude,
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 of hard work, dedication
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 the job, sincerity and determination
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 humankind valuable.
Therefore
, education is vital to achieve a degree and
to
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start a career while with experience numbers of opportunities are higher. In my opinion, work experience along with analytical skills derived from qualified education can ensure a well-paid profession.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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