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The given flow chart illustrates the process of how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces weather forecasts. Overall, the process can be divided into two main stages, which are the collecting
stage
 and the other is the broadcasting
stage
.
In addition
, the
information
 undergoes a series of analyses and preparation ,
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 it is transformed into a reliable weather
forecast
. Looking
first
 at the collecting
stage
 ,
first
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 the Australian bureau of meteorology utilizes three different methods to gather
information
. The
information
that is
 collected from satellites can be shown in the satellite photo.
Moreover
, the data collected from satellites as well as from radar stations can
also
 be shown on the radar screen and synoptic chart. As for drifting buoy, the collected data can only be observed on the synoptic. After all the
information
 is gathered, the bureau
then
 analyzes the data and produces the
forecast
. Moving onto the broadcasting
stage
, after the analysis and
forecast
, all the preparation work is done on the computer.
Finally
, the weather
forecast
 is
then
 delivered to the public via TV newsreader, radio and record announcement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Information on Demand
  • Educational Opportunities
  • Cultural Exchange
  • Enhanced Communication
  • Information Overload
  • Echo Chambers
  • Privacy Concerns
  • Mental Health Impact
  • instant access
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
  • intercultural dialogue
  • media platforms
  • data breaches
  • intrusive advertising
  • excessive media consumption
  • online interactions
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