Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely.

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Sharing essential scientific results is a controversial issue which has its own pros and cons. It should be mentioned that the value of some data is respectful and some should be available conveniently, which both will be discussed here. On the
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of a person who has been
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people's lives. As I discussed here under some specific
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public should be aware of business or academic research results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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