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For many people, profession is the lifelong commitment. They start their carrier in one profession and stick to it through their life. For some others, there is no need to stick to one carrier or one profession. They even pursue multiple carriers at once. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays having
a
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job
 security and a profession is a lifelong commitment. Some
people
 start their
career
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 in one company and stick to
this
 position until they retire.
However
, there are different types of
people
 who aspire to
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 and pursue multiple
jobs
 at once. In
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 we will discuss
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the pros and cons of these two arguments. Some
people
 are reluctant to
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, so they
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therefore
 prefer to perform the same
job
 their entire life. One of the
reason
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 is that they have
a
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job
 security and they have a comfort zone. On the other side, they could have applied for other
jobs
 but are not satisfied with the conditions and salary proposed by the new company, so they stay in their actual
job
. Unfortunately, doing the same
job
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lifelong could be boring and frustrating.
On the other hand
, some
people
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 to experience new eras, so they change
jobs
 or they like to do multitasks and perform several
jobs
 at a time. The advantage of doing several
jobs
 is that person becomes an experienced person in terms of knowing different cultures of different companies.
Moreover
, having faced different challenges helps him to be
more wise
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 and
are
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better at decision making. Nowadays, many companies look for persons who have
such
 type of experience. Inadvertently, a person who
change
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job
 regularly can
also
 be perceived as unstable and
this
 could be a bad image as well. In conclusion, I believe that someone who experiences several
jobs
 is much more interesting and versatile. I believe that changing
job
 has more significant advantages than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong commitment
  • Start their career
  • Stick to
  • Multiple careers
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Specialization
  • Career progression
  • Exploration
  • Variety
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptability
  • Enhanced skills and knowledge
  • Balanced approach
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