For many people, profession is the lifelong commitment. They start their carrier in one profession and stick to it through their life. For some others, there is no need to stick to one carrier or one profession. They even pursue multiple carriers at once. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays having
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job
security and a profession is a lifelong commitment. Some
people
start their
career
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in one company and stick to
this
position until they retire.
However
, there are different types of
people
who aspire to
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and pursue multiple
jobs
at once. In
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we will discuss
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the pros and cons of these two arguments. Some
people
are reluctant to
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, so they
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therefore
prefer to perform the same
job
their entire life. One of the
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is that they have
a
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job
security and they have a comfort zone. On the other side, they could have applied for other
jobs
but are not satisfied with the conditions and salary proposed by the new company, so they stay in their actual
job
. Unfortunately, doing the same
job
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lifelong could be boring and frustrating.
On the other hand
, some
people
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to experience new eras, so they change
jobs
or they like to do multitasks and perform several
jobs
at a time. The advantage of doing several
jobs
is that person becomes an experienced person in terms of knowing different cultures of different companies.
Moreover
, having faced different challenges helps him to be
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and
are
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better at decision making. Nowadays, many companies look for persons who have
such
type of experience. Inadvertently, a person who
change
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job
regularly can
also
be perceived as unstable and
this
could be a bad image as well. In conclusion, I believe that someone who experiences several
jobs
is much more interesting and versatile. I believe that changing
job
has more significant advantages than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong commitment
  • Start their career
  • Stick to
  • Multiple careers
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Specialization
  • Career progression
  • Exploration
  • Variety
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptability
  • Enhanced skills and knowledge
  • Balanced approach
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