You recently took up a part-time job for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took up the job describe the problems you experienced suggest what could be done about them

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Dear Sir, I am lily. I have joined the part-time job as a Receptionist in your Paradise Hotel since May. I have taken the job to gain some experience and which would

Add a missing verb

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helpful

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in my future career

also

. I am writing to your kind attention to

few

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a few

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issues that I have encountered in the Hotel. I have noticed that some of

night

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the night

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duty staff

sleeps

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sleep

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inside the rooms or quarters

instead

to be

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duty. Literally, I and Lindsay- who

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also

a new employee, work and manage everything at night. They even do not bother to come to the reception area at busy hours when we have an influx of guests - usually on Friday nights. I believe

this

is against the rules.

Moreover

, breakfast is supposed to be ready before 7:00 am but it is not the case. Sometimes the guests have to wait till 8:00 am for breakfast to arrive. Some of the guests have lodged complaints regarding

this

. I thought you should be notified about these irregularities. Duty officers on the night shift should be given warning so that they execute their duties.

Besides

, look at the recent complaints regarding the delay in breakfast serving and talk to the head chef. I look forward to hear from you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Lily

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

219 words

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