You recently took up a part-time job for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took up the job describe the problems you experienced suggest what could be done about them

Dear Sir, I am lily. I have joined the part-time job as a Receptionist in your Paradise Hotel since May. I have taken the job to gain some experience and which would
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in my future career
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. I am writing to your kind attention to
few
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issues that I have encountered in the Hotel. I have noticed that some of
night
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duty staff
sleeps
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inside the rooms or quarters
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to be
at
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duty. Literally, I and Lindsay- who
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a new employee, work and manage everything at night. They even do not bother to come to the reception area at busy hours when we have an influx of guests - usually on Friday nights. I believe
this
is against the rules.
Moreover
, breakfast is supposed to be ready before 7:00 am but it is not the case. Sometimes the guests have to wait till 8:00 am for breakfast to arrive. Some of the guests have lodged complaints regarding
this
. I thought you should be notified about these irregularities. Duty officers on the night shift should be given warning so that they execute their duties.
Besides
, look at the recent complaints regarding the delay in breakfast serving and talk to the head chef. I look forward to hear from you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Lily
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