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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently, a new neighbour Mr.Jackson moved in who has loud parties several times a week. You have spoken to Mr.Jackson but are not very close friends Write a letter to Mr.Jackson. In your letter: • Explain the situation • Describe why it bothers you • Suggest a solution

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Dear
Mr.
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 Jackson, I am writing
this
 letter to have disturbance in my studies due to your frequent celebrations which involve music on
loud speakers
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. I have observed various times that you organize parties at your place and play songs at high volume till
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late
night
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.
Moreover
, many guests come
in
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 your apartment and make huge noise while ravishing the party. I moved to
this
 building with
an
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 intention to prepare for a competitive exam.
However
, I am unable to study for
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 two months because of your events as you play loud music throughout the night, which hinders my sleep.
Consequently
, I fail to be productive while I study because of incomplete sleep, which is a serious concern for me as the test is approaching soon.
Therefore
, I request you to understand my circumstances and try to cooperate with me. I request you to organize parties only on weekends since I visit my parents on those days.
Furthermore
, you can continue your gatherings once my test is over which is in the
next
 month. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, John
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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