Some people believe that traveling with in a city is better by a car while other think bicycle is better means. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, in
this
modern era pollution has been increasing day by day. The transparent system makes more polluted the
environment
.some
people
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car
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short travelling, while others think that bicycles are a better option rather than
the
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. I discuss both views in
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paragraphs. On the one hand, travelling by
a
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car
better option for long distances it is Faster than a
bicycle
.it has more comfortable and safe driving.
Moreover
, the government has improved road conditions in the
city
. Mostly,
people
choose their own
car
rather than public transport facilities.
For example
, a survey conducted by BBC news channel showed that 60% of individuals choose their own
car
that
travel
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Rather than public transportation.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that
bicycle
is more beneficial as compared to
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car
. Because it does not create pollution in the
environment
it is an eco-friendly system. The government should make new
bicycle
tracks in the
city
for public travelling by
bicycle
in the
city
.
Bicycle
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has been
also
more beneficial for health issues it decreases disease in the human body and makes the active body.
Furthermore
, the countryside area public has fewer diseases in the body because they live in a clean
environment
and they choose
bicycle
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in
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a short distance
as
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rather than
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a car
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car
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.
For instance
, according to the ,study the United Kingdom has cleaned the
environment
rather than other nations because it makes new
bicycle
tracks and provides
city
maps for each person. In my opinion,
the
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bicycle
have
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more beneficial for the
environment
rather than cars because it is an eco-friendly system but,
people
can travel in the
city
and cover short distances.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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