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Some experts beleive that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Do the advatages and outweigh the disadvantages

#experts #beleive #children #language #school #advatages
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Nowadays, English is becoming
international
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an international
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language
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. Some
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strata
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children
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to learn
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learning
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 overseas
tongue
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early
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 most
inviduals
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individuals
 opposed that idea .In
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essay
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 we will discuss
positive
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one's
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 and
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 of
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Firstly
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, learning
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a foreign
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an early
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 is better because they are less afraid of making mistakes .
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also
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 make
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 because they
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 what they say .
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children
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 brain is fresh
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 primary
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 they learn more vocabulary at
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beginning
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beggining
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beginning
 of their
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children
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 brain is fresh they remind words which they learn at
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 and use them in their daily
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cousion
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cousin
is study
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is studied
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 in
france
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France
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 he was about 11 years old and they
english
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 very well with their parents and teachers .
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, there are many drawbacks of learning
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a foreign
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 at starting level of
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children
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 .The most important aspect is parent contribution at home .Because
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,
children
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their native
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their
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a foreign
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language
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. If,
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 thing happen student give up their learning because of
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 issue he was
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immature
inmature
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immature
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stage
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 .In daily
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life
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children
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 feel
burden
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a burden
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 on their
mind
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minds
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 because their teacher
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teaches
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him
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them
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 other knowledge while they speak
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their native
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 with socials . To sum
up
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 all , learning
foreign
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a foreign
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school
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life
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 because they are not
critized
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criticized
 for their errors and their mind is fresh at
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stage
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 .on the other side, they feel
burden
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a burden
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 on
mind
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 and they give up their study because of native speakers .
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