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Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It goes without saying that the amount of international flights has increased
,
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 because modern
people
 have more possibilities to
travel
 as they started to earn more money.
People
’s opinions differ, as to whether international
travel
 should be restricted due to the negative impact on the
environment
, while others don’t see any problem
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 it. Personally, I believe that international
travel
 imposes some risks on the
environment
, but those effects can be mitigated. We
all
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 aware that the ecological situation in the world is getting worse and worse, and, of course, partly it happens because of the fact that the number of flights
have
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 skyrocketed if we compare it with
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those 50 years ago.
In addition
,
people
 are getting more and more capricious they are not satisfied with just ancient architecture, they want something unique some places that are vital
eco
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system
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, especially those fragile areas like Antarctica.
That is
 why many
people
 opt for restricting international flights. In my opinion, as
people
 are used to
travel
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 it will be very difficult to restrict international
travel
, and of
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 it will
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 greatly tourist business,
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 will
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loose
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 jobs. I think that we should better try to find other solutions by
explain
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 the
inpat
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impact
input
part
 of the flight to
tourist
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 so they can choose
travelling
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 by
trains
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, and as it has become more comfortable \ faster and
convenient
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, it will reduce any threats to the
environment
. In conclusion, there are risks to the
environment
 from increased international
travel
, but
such
travel
 is important and any risks can be offset by different measures.
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