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What are the pros and cons for children of watching TV?

#children #tv
There is no doubt that
children
 spend
time
 watching
television
. While there are many benefits
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of
ofto
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to
 watching
television
 for
children
, there are
also
 some drawbacks
of
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this
 more superior. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of
children
 watching
television
. One of the main positives of heading watching
television
 is that the
children
 will knowledge about technology even as a child.
This
 can make them more excited and self-confident when supporting old people in using technology. They only know about technology but
also
 update life information quickly. Another advantage of watching
television
 is that it inspires
children
.
For example
: when they watch a talented doctor, they will want to be
such
 a doctor. One of the biggest disadvantages of
children
 watching TV is that they will have health problems. They will get less exercise and
then
 they may become obese. Another major drawback is that it can waste a lot of precious
time
. They will not participate in outdoor activities and do not have
time
 to do homework. Day in and day out,
children
 will not be to graduate from school with flying
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. In conclusion, there are clearly both pros and cons when kids watch
television
. While watching TV can be a great relaxation after a long day, for many
children
 it makes them addicted. In my opinion, if you use your
time
 watching TV reasonably, you feel comfortable and love life more.
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