“Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”

“Some believe that
people
are naturally born
leaders
while
others feel that
leadership
skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.” Introduction
According to
people
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perspective
leadership
is a
god gifted
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quality that cannot be learned but
that
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people
’s perspective and nothing in
this
world can’t be learned with dedication and repetition.
Leadership
is an action
not
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a position.
The
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matter of fact
is that
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the practical meaning of
leadership
is far different from
theoretical
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world. The bookish language will assist you for sure but to be a great leader, a person should hold two
qualities
courage and persistence
along with
hard work and that leads him to enormous victories. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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if a person has
this
god gifted
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quality and yet does not utilize his true potential in terms of
leadership
that means he runs his own life by himself
and
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on the other hand
if a person aims to change he will ;indeed. ‘’Man cannot remake himself without suffering for he is both the marble and the sculpture’’ There is an example of
leadership
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the leadership
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qualities
of Nelson Mandela who always
think
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for the next generation,
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and
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never
focus
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focused
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election
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on election
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. He always
motivate
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motivated
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his nation
,
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and picked his nation from the darkness to
bright
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a bright
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future, he always talked about
rule
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the rule
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of law and never broke any law. And for those who think that
leadership
qualities
can built
actually
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they were talking about politicians and politicians always
show-off
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their activities
just
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and just
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act like
leaders
but they are not
leaders
and they
not
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do not
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have
leadership
qualities
, they always
focused
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focus
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just on the next election to make
people
fool. The best example of
such
type
people
of is Nawaz Sharif from Pakistan. That applies to the fact that if you are desperate enough to attain heights of success
then
for sure you will
attain
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.
This
then
ends the contradiction that
leadership
is a quality
people
are naturally born with, with dedication anyone can learn the art of
leadership
, coming to the conclusion of my essay.
Leadership
always
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born naturally
the
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their
qualities
are GOD-GEFITED but
peoples
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people
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can
also
learn a lot
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of
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Good
Qualities
as
leaders
have, with the passage of time.
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