“Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”

Introduction According to
people
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perspective
leadership
is a
god gifted
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quality that cannot be learned but
that
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people
’s perspective and nothing in
this
world can’t be learned with dedication and repetition.
Leadership
is an action
not
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a position.
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matter of fact is that the practical meaning of
leadership
is far different from
theoretical
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world. The bookish language will assist you for sure but to be a great leader, a person should hold two
qualities
courage and persistence along with hard work and that leads him to enormous victories. In my
opinion
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if a person has
this
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quality and yet does not utilize his true potential in terms of
leadership
that means he runs his own life by himself
and
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on the other hand
if a person aims to change he will ;indeed. ‘’Man cannot remake himself without suffering for he is both the marble and the sculpture’’ There is an example of
leadership
qualities
of Nelson Mandela who always think for the
next
generation,
never
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focus
election
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. He always
motivate
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his nation, and picked his nation from the darkness to
bright
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future, he always talked about rule of law and never broke any law. And for those who think that
leadership
qualities
can
built
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actually
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they were talking about politicians and politicians always
show-off
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their activities
just
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act like leaders but they are not leaders and they
not
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have
leadership
qualities
, they always focused just on the
next
election to make
people
fool. The best example of
such
type
people
of is Nawaz Sharif from Pakistan. That applies to the fact that if you are desperate enough to attain heights of success
then
for sure you will
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.
This
then
ends the contradiction that
leadership
is a quality
people
are naturally born with, with dedication anyone can learn the art of
leadership
, coming to the conclusion
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • despite

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