Some people think that getting degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, while others believe that it would be better go straight into work and get experience. Discus both sides and give your opinion.

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It is widely acknowledged that education is one of the most crucial and fundamental things for

people

nowadays. Some

people

support the opinion that

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, as well as doctoral

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possibly to get

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by the best

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, others believe that gain more experience and

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sophisticated

rather than the previous point.

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have advantages and disadvantages, In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support those viewpoints will be outlined.

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of all, I strongly believe that

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should have the right to make their own choices and it is undeniable that education

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crucial for job qualification. Owning with,

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high position or high benefit in various

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there requires post-graduated significantly knowledge in

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academics

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as lawyers, doctors, as well as

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an engineer

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pupils

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in university are graduated without experience and will waste their time for many years to getting experience before working in good

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On the contrary

, some

people

after their graduated in

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such

as high school or diplomas they said "

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is the best way to working in various dream

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with good experiences" That means academic

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and have very

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in their working. In conclusion, These both

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on which

degree

or experiences are more crucial to get your dream

jobs

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, It is still a very personal question since both of these have

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and drawbacks that have to be

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considered

considerd

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considered

by individuals.

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