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Some people think that fresh water should be freely available, while others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
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 think that fresh
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 should be freely available, while others think that governments should tightly control the use of
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 debate and give my opinion. On the one hand, some
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 argue that we should pay for
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. They suggest that
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 is a utility and it is a service provided to the public.
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, we should pay for
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 because it is a limited
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. To illustrate
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, if
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 doesn't cost anything, the community will not respect
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 natural
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 anymore and they will start to waste it.
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, some
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 say that
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 should be free of charge and should always be available everywhere. It is
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because
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 is a basic need of every human being and there is a serious lack of
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 in some places.
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, access to safe
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 was declared a basic human right by the UN, and
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shouldn't
shoudn't
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shouldn't
 have to pay for basic rights. In conclusion, some
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 think that fresh
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 should be freely available, while others believe governments should tightly control the use of
fresh
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water
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 as it is
limited
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a limited
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resource
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. I think that
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 is limited, it should be paid
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 full because it is a basic need and basic right of every human and we should educate
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 to use it properly
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 it cost money.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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