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Some people think that fresh water should be freely available, while others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 think that fresh
water
 should be freely available, while others think that governments should tightly control the use of
fresh
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water
 as it is
limited
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a limited
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resource
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views
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this
 debate and give my opinion. On the one hand, some
people
 argue that we should pay for
water
. They suggest that
water
 is a utility and it is a service provided to the public.
Firstly
, we should pay for
water
 because it is a limited
resource
. To illustrate
this
, if
water
 doesn't cost anything, the community will not respect
this
 natural
resource
 anymore and they will start to waste it.
On the other hand
, some
people
 say that
water
 should be free of charge and should always be available everywhere. It is
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because
bacause
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because
water
 is a basic need of every human being and there is a serious lack of
water
 in some places.
For example
, access to safe
water
 was declared a basic human right by the UN, and
people
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shouldn't
shoudn't
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shouldn't
 have to pay for basic rights. In conclusion, some
people
 think that fresh
water
 should be freely available, while others believe governments should tightly control the use of
fresh
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water
 as it is
limited
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a limited
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resource
. I think that
although
water
 is limited, it should be paid
in
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 full because it is a basic need and basic right of every human and we should educate
people
 to use it properly
instead
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make
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 it cost money.
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