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Inspite of advancements made in agriculture there are some people still remain hungry. Give causes and solutions

#inspite #advancements #agriculture #people
Agriculture
 plays a vital role in providing food to the globe,
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in spite
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 of the advancement in
agriculture
 many
people
 in the world are still hungry. There are many reasons behind
this
problem
.
This
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industralisation
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industrialisation
industrialization
 and poor
government
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policies
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polices
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policies
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 are the root cause of
this
problem
 and how through effective
governments
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planning
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planing
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,
this
problem
 can be controlled to a large extent.
Firstly
, in the modern world
people
 are focusing on
indutrialisation
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industrialisation
industrialization
 as they are converting
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agricultural
land
in to
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the
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industrial
land
.
For example
, in different
asian
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countries
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 we can see that at present the
land
 for
agriculture
 has been reduced much as compared to the past.Take an example of
Serilanka
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Srilanka
where
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 a number of
people
 are converting their
land
in to
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 an industrial area to earn money.
Secondly
, there are many
advance
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 technologies
has
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 been introduced in
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agriculture
 for increasing the production rate of crops and these advancements are very effective.
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In spite
Inspite
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In spite
 of
this
 there are many
people
remained
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who remained
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hugry
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hungry
 as they can not get access at cheap prices.
For instance
, when food reached
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the market it becomes very expensive and out of reach to the layman as
some times
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sometimes
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 due the bad weather conditions like floods it will become very difficult to mobile the products to the market due to the poor
government
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policies
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polices
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policies
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.
However
, there are certain viable measures that can be taken to
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overcome
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over come
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 these problems.The primary solution, I believe
government
 should take action against these types of
people
 by making strict laws against their actions.
Furthermore
,the local
government
 should make plans for bad days and
also
 should
insure
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 the availability of
appropriate
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 transport system to mobile the harvested crops to the markets.
This
problem
 should be tackled through
proper
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 transport system. To sum up, due to
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universal disasters like floods, and
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 in industrialisation reduce the availability of enough food to the public. But with the help of appropriate steps taken by the
government
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 these issues should be solved.
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